itch.io

I love the idea! I can't wait until it's more fleshed out, My three current itches: the red boys only dropped money once for me, all my rbc keep dying, but the game doesn't end automatically, and the combat is too hard :'(

Loved it. No notes.

This is exactly what it feels like

love it!

I hated the controls.

 I consistently love your artwork! As far as the text goes, it needs some work the grammar needs some work. Plus, the outcomes don't all make sense. Still, it was much easier to read than the last one!

Why didn't the pheromone thing come up again?  She was turned on by them in her room. She was turned on them during the one encounter with Kazuki. Then he had to force her the next time anyway.  You also made it seem like she would submit to someone being firm with her like the son was with his mom in your last VN. I thought this could be a nice progression of him being mean and tearing down this Queen Bee's walls.  

The backstory you wrote about owning the building, the blackmail, the listening in, and the gathered information about weaknesses weren't necessary because Kazuki just grabbed her. That's just regular assault, and it makes your disclaimer about all the acts being consensual untrue.  It's important to note that both men and women have physical reactions when attacked even if they aren't willing.  

I've seen it done where a character made people act on their desires with some encouragement from a magical amulet. Everyone wanted to have sex with MC, but they needed "help" overcoming their doubts/ insecurities. People still got into all sorts of trouble. Cheating, orgies, bisexual/gay/straight things that they didn't know they were into, sub/dom relationships, ect. 

You won me over with the words pixel art! 

I'll also take a look at your other vn.

I think this is a good start. I love the concept.  The grammar is pretty far from correct, and the whole thing got too wordy for me.  I specifically disliked when you switched from first person to third person mid-scene several times, sometimes even mid-sentence; you repeated parts of phrases; and you didn't make it clear when Dave went from speaking to thinking.

If you sent me the script I could go over it, edit it, and give some suggestions. I've always been interested in editing, but I have been out of Uni for too long to ask someone to pay me for it. Plus, I would love to see this work do well.

THAT WAS SO INTENSE!  I feel like a  better player now too.

I want to donate without downloading the game. 

Is this by the same people as Sprout Valley?

We all wish that we could stay one step ahead, especially in high school.  I think both parties communicated better differently. It's good to know the truth, but now I'm sad.

I got ending four and I'm actively mad

Loved it

I cried